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I was running so fast
Running from you, I think
I was falling so fast
Falling hard for you
I think it was a dream
A bittersweet escape
For a time
But now I know it was all a lie
Just another sad page in my book
So now I write
I think to say
I’m ok now
I can breathe again
©2008-2009 ~sAINTMalice9
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This piece is great. The point is consice and clear and you you get there with really good pacing. I believe nothing is perfect, so if I could, I would like to say with a little work on the pacing and a nudge on a little of the phrasing, this would be just wonderful. Thank you for sharing.

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